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Hedge Trimming – Bidding Adieu to Ambivalence
It is another glorious August morning; the dog days are past, there is a slight nip in the air, and the New England sky is taking on the vibrant blue of ear…ly autumn. A perfect day for hedge trimming.
I am not talking about shaggy privets or laurels, or overgrown rhododendron and yew turning the yard into a wilderness and begging for the touch of well-edged shears. No, I am referring to the stray equivocations that seep insidiously into our prose – wee, verbal field mice, gnawing away at our meaning. Seems to be, more or less, essentially, about, almost as if, sort of, as it were…. The list goes on with the persistence of a Minoan labyrinth.
They dilute our prose and sap our meaning. Unless spouted by a character less decisive than Hamlet’s second cousin twice removed, they are unnecessary 99.9% of the time. We know this deep in our souls, yet they continue to plague us like verbal viruses we just can’t shake.
From where does this urge to mitigate our authorial voice come?
As with most of our bad writing habits, I believe it comes from writing as we talk. And live – or strive to.
In my youth, lo so many years ago, I was taught to tread lightly through the world. Each step, each word has consequences even if they’re not immediately evident. I was also taught that truth is seldom absolute and to presume to know The Truth about anything is the height of arrogance. The pride before the fall. Call it the Rashomon Effect. (note: truths are not to be confused with facts, which, while open to interpretation are in and of themselves quantifiable constants.) In a cosmic sense, there are as many truths as there are beings in the universe. If we are lucky, we will find one or two that meet our needs, asking for more is just greedy. A venal sin, avarice.
While such life lessons served me well for being in the world, it took me years to discover – then believe – that the opposite was true for writing in the world. Writing has hedges of a different cut, and the fictive voice must be authoritarian, even dictatorial. Shed the hedges – trim them, if you will – from your prose. Cast doubt aside and rage through the landscapes of your making. Be certain. No deference to the masses or shilly-shallying will suffice. We serve the story, after all.
I know this sounds arrogant, and, well, it is. You are the architects of your novels and short stories, and no structure stands with foundations ‘sort of’ level or walls ‘roughly’ plumb. There is nothing relativistic here. As the sole creator of your universe, your truth is absolute and no one can say otherwise. But make your truth precise, memorable, and believable enough to touch. A heroine isn’t ‘rather impressive,’ she’s six feet of Artemesian grace, with a mind like Susan Sontag and the riveting gaze of the Delphi charioteer. This is a woman you not only see in your mind’s eye, but know how she’ll stack up against whatever villains come her way.
I am fond of saying the anarchist in me balks at blind obedience to even the most reasonable rules. In the case of hedging, I am more inclined than usual to set my anarchism aside. Still, if the mantle of authorial power sits uncomfortably on your shoulder and you feel compelled to equivocate, try to do so unequivocally. If you must hedge here and there to appease the spirit of your prose, let those hedges be topiaries, wild and wondrous, adding to your world, not detracting from it.
Alan Patrick Traynor (@Facepoet) said:
We serve the story, after all! Exactly! You know what Shawn, I have a feeling I am in the presence of greatness and between the lines of a writer heaving this fine staunch arrow from the hedgerow of Joan of Arc. Even when you are meandering in a contrived mess of cut sentences and equivocations you wow me! I’m serious, your style of writing and exploration is seasoned with the finest herbs a sharpened blade could ever expect to ravish reverently. The imagery and how you begin this day of war towards the blue sunrise is magnificent…your peasant poet leaves the courtyard with the sun in his face and full of the fresh injections of light from the master’s shears 🙂 Thank you Shawn…
-Patrick
Shawn MacKENZIE said:
Patrick, I am honored by your generous words. I only hope to continue concocting sapid delights as the weeks go on.
This piece started as something I wrote about 8 years ago. When I looked at it, I realized I was a much better writer now than then – thank Goddess! – and so threw it out and started from scratch. Eminently worthwhile as a reminder of how we grow.
Have a wonderful day, my friend.
Shawn
p.s. I have some Traynor poetry reading to catch up on! What a delight!
ontheplumtree said:
Reblogged this on On The Plum Tree and commented:
Well! It’s kind of like this…I am a sort of field mouse, as it were, gnawing away at meaning, if you know what I mean! Jokes aside – what a sparkling Mandala of prose from our Editor’s Corner. Enter this labyrinth if you dare!
Shawn MacKENZIE said:
Thank you , Niamh. And for the reblog. Field mouse, eh? I always suspect there is a fearless lion inside every mouse. 🙂
ontheplumtree said:
Me too! Thank you for such a great post.
BUTTERFLIES OF TIME said:
Reblogged this on BUTTERFLIES OF TIME and commented:
This has come at such a needed time!!! Here is to shedding those weary wings and taking a dive into the deep blue ocean of words from the highest cliff and causing a big splash. Thank You Shawn once again !
Shawn MacKENZIE said:
Thanks, Butterflies, for kind words and reblog. Splash away with abandon. The water is fine. 🙂
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Alan Patrick Traynor (@Facepoet) said:
You all are wonderful delving writers…pleasure to know you all and be part of this new emergence of writers and great thinkers…I feel enlightened knowing you all…Shawn you are a genius as you grow into a genius even further…now I go out into world and ponder the hedgerow and the shears as the light takes care of the leaves that blow down the old thoughts of trees…ciao ciao my dear friends and to you O fellow mouse of Heaven’s great doorway…you are a Lioness amid the highest… 🙂
Shawn MacKENZIE said:
You walk the world with panache and needle-sharp quill, Patrick. Ciao!
Patricia Tilton said:
Really like the comment “We serve the story.” Brilliant post written with great abandon! To have such a gift with words.
Shawn MacKENZIE said:
Thank you, Patricia. So glad you enjoyed it.
jenean c gilstrap (@gypsywomanworld) said:
o holy hedge clippers, batwoman! catwoman! wonderwoman! seems my clippers have already clipped…clipped my speech and i am left speechless – but as you might say, sometimes less is more…so i end with just one little unclipped clipping: magnifique!
Shawn MacKENZIE said:
Marvelous, Jenean! And welcome!!
the secret keeper said:
Be bold and shout out your thoughts & feelings. no holding back. I like to follow the guts D.H. Lawrence had. He basically told everyone to F&ck off. He wrote what he felt. Honest to the core. Just like a certain recently published poet beginning with the name Alan Patrick. Nothing held back. What is the point in that. Boring. the pep talk. Maybe that is what writers & poets & all artists alike need the circle of truth and hands held high ans slap before we go out their with our words of Truth. Jk ps. words being a figure of speech standing for our instrument of creation.
Shawn MacKENZIE said:
Pep talks always welcome. Sadly bravado and hedging are not mutually exclusive. Hence, shears at the ready! 🙂
karenrsanderson said:
Good post, Shawn. I call these “wishy-washy” and try not to use them myself. Though I fall into the trap sometimes. Which reminds me – sometimes, anyone, something, someone, anything. Don’t much like those either. Be specific and colorful!
Shawn MacKENZIE said:
Spot on, Karen. The -times, -ones, and -things, yes. Though there are occasions when they are the only words that will fit, too often they slip in because we don’t make the effort to be more precise.
jackspratt823 said:
Murder your darlings – good advice for any writer.
Shawn MacKENZIE said:
True enough. No darlings in hedges, though, just shear delight at their removal. 🙂